Working on my essay

I have a really good process on my food essay revision. The biggest problem I have is my tense problem. In my essay, there are lots of place that I used the wrong tense for wrong time. Such as the place I need to use present tense I used past tense. This make my essay become very awkward and not smooth. To make my writing become better, I first start with reread my work again. The reason why I did this is because I want to know where I got wrong and need to improve. Then I take some notes on each paragraph, the notes are about what tense should I use for. I can know what I need to change by reading my notes and I won’t forget what should I do before. However, the tense problem is just one of the problem I have in my writing. Second thing I am going to work on is the descriptive language. In my writing, there are several place that the language I used are weak and boring. Using more descriptive language can help my essay become more interesting and vivid. I tried to not using some weak word like big, long, red...those kind of simple and weak word. Instead of those word, I use some word like unpredictable, unbelievable, movable...etc. This will definitely help my writing become more interesting and will let the reader willing to continued to read. These two are the main problems that I am working on right now, but there are still many detial that I can make my essay become even better than now.