Who won the Best~

Everyone have a really interesting or twisting story, however, if I need to pick the top three from our class they will be Sera’s “The unusual”, Amanda’s “The Witch”, and Zen’s “Wind”

I think Sera’s writing could be the top place in our class. She have a really clear introduction with descrive how is the object looks like or what is the feeling that it give. The way she describe are just like describing a person but not a object. It is just like that person is very scary and mystery. The ward she used was also vivid, such as “ Its age and color were the main factors for it to frighten other people” She describe the special place by not just telling the reader about it but kind of bend the meaning to let the reader to guess, which I think is really good for reader when they read the story. At the middle and last part of the story, the object seems to become more like one of the little boy’s treasure because he start to protact it, or I should say he like it. This is also count as one type of twist because at first the boy didn’t like it but he like it at the end which is totally opposite. There are many twist in the story and the ward are also vivid, that is why she can be the first place in the class.

Second story I like is Amanda’s “The Witch” When I first read it, I’m kind of confus about what is she talking about in the story. I’m not sure she is talking about the room or the weather. The reason why I will say that is because at the middle part she wrote that the room become cold and freezing. At that moment, I was thinking about the weather is very cold, but she is talking about the witch make her feel cold when she saw the face. After reading servial time, I finally understand what she try to say. I like the one sentence she use to turn the story. At first I think it is not complete and make it not smooth at all, but after understand her writing style I realize it is a really good sentence to divide her story into two part. It is just like a turning point and now I think that is a very interesting way of writing story.

Thrid place I will give to Zen’s story “Wind” He use lots of repeat sentences in his writing, I almost think that the reason why he do that is because he want to make more word count. However, while I reading forward I found out that it is very interesting and his writing was more like a poem. He describe wind as her and give the wind action or emotion that only people will do, which we called is personification in grammar. I really like it because he give a twist story by let people think he was talking about a person but is a weather. Everything is perfect but according to Ms.Guarino “Wind is not warm during winter time.” That is the only place he should change! :D